Expect the Unexpected
Rachel Peterson was your typical sixteen year old girl. Always has an attitude, talks
back to her parents, and does whatever she wants when she wants. Hang out with her
friends Emily, Isabelle, and Kelly. The group of friends she hangs out with were known
as the “popular group” at school so they thought that they were all that. The four girls
never left each others side, they were basically inseparable. One night they were
hanging out and talking about all this gossip that was happening on facebook but
Rachel had no idea what was going on because she was the only without a facebook
account. So she thought about it and finally just decided to get herself a facebook
account. In a heartbeat all of the people at her started to add her as a friend. Then this
random guy added her, which she thought she knew he but really did not, and
accepted him.
The next few days went by and she realized she had a message on facebook from
the guy she did not know. His name was Dwayne Miller. The message said, ‘Hey.’ and
that was it. So she thought to herself do I reply or do I not? Then finally, about thirty
minutes later she replied with just a simple ‘Hey.’
They were messaging back and forth for a while and she finally asked who he was.
His reply was “I’m from a neighboring town by yours called Albany.”
“I have never seen you before or have not even even heard of you.” she said back.
“I saw you at a volleyball one game and thought you were cute so I decided to add
you on here.”
She simply replied with, “umm.. okay?” and they continued their conversation.
They talked pretty much everyday after that. They were getting pretty close. They
talked for hours and hours, sometimes until three in the morning. He always talked
about coming to hang out with her, she never knew how to reply because she does not
even know who he really is. So she finally just said okay and they planned a date to
hang out and actually meet each other.
It was a cold October Saturday morning, when Rachel got the facebook message
saying that Dwayne was on his way over to hang out. She started to get butterflies in
her stomach and pacing around the house. She cleaned the house for that it was
spotless. Made sure everything was perfect for he did not think she was a slob or
anything like that. About 45 minutes later he showed up to her house. She really could
not believe that he was really at her house. Her heart was racing. He did not look like
his profile picture at all. Thats when she started to panic. Then she heard the knock at
the door. She thought to herself do I answer it or no? She walked up to the door and
opened it. In a blink of an eye, he put a bag over her head and threw her into the trunk
of his car.
Rachel was screaming bloody murder. Trying to get noticed but no one could hear
her over the loud car. She did not have her phone on her or anything that she could
get ahold of anyone on. This has never happened to her or crossed her mind that this
would happen to her at any point in her life. So she looked around the car after she got
the bag off her head and noticed that she could kick out the lights to see where she
was. After she kicked the light out she noticed that she was on the country back roads
in the middle of no where. That is when she started to freak out. Thinking to herself
that she was going to get taken to a place where she was going to be killed.
The car finally came to a stop. She took a look real quick to see where she was and
she was at an old farm house. It looked really sketchy. Then she heard footprints, her
heart started to beat like there was no tomorrow. Dwayne opened the trunk and pulled
her out. He threw her over his shoulder to take inside the house.
Back at Rachel’s house her parents have just got back home from work. They called
for Rachel but no answer. They searched the house to try to find her but nothing. Her
parents called the police right away. Everyone was on the hunt to try to find Rachel.
Rachel was the only child so she meant everything to her parents. She was their little
princess. So they were determined to find her.
At the farm house, Dwayne took Rachel into a dark room. She could not see
anything but knew that it was not going to be good. He put her on the bed while he
went to turn on some lights. Once the lights were on she noticed knifes, scissors, and
even a gun laying around. She wanted to scream but knew that he would do
something worse to her. He came back and grabbed the knife and put it up against her
neck.
Rachel’s parents were looking all over town for her. The police were out on the hunt
too. It was posted everywhere, ‘Missing Rachel Peterson.’ The police were out on the
back roads looking and come to the sketchy looking old farm house that looked like no
one lived there but was a car there with a light missing. The two policemen drove up to
the house and went in there. They came to the room where Rachel was. They got
there right in time before he could do anything to her. The police grabbed Dwayne and
put him in the police car. Rachel’s parents were called to the farm house right away to
come and get her. After they came a got there they went straight home to delete her
facebook for nothing like this would ever happen again
I really enjoyed this story. It did end kinda fast, i think it could have been a bit longer, but other than that it was awesome(: ~Sammi Burleson
ReplyDeleteIt was a bit confusing, and it should've been a little longer
ReplyDeleteI liked this story. Your grammar and punctuation is good.
ReplyDelete-Hannah Nitz
I really liked this story but I think it could have been a bit longer with more information.
ReplyDeleteI liked the idea of it, but it would have been even better with more detail.
ReplyDeleteThis was a good idea for a story.
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